Saphone Mareksson and Tintaglia Istalri

[Dragonkin]

Name: Saphone Mareksson
Other Name: Little One (An affectionate name given to Saphone by Tintaglia his dragon and partner for life)
Race: Half Elf, half Human (Dragon Rider)
Side: Varden
Birthplace: Osilon
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Birthday: 4/2

Eyes: Sapphire blue
Hair: Average Length, Light Chestnut (Brown)
Weight: 175 lbs
Height:5"11

Magic User: Yes, to a degree

Weapons: "Islingr" Hand and a half sword (bastard sword), Bow, Medium Armor, Medium Shield

Appearence: Years of tutelage under Oromis and Glaedr have calmed him and put his soul at peace but is still rough around the edges , light skin tone, smooth face, long arms, tough shoulders, happy, young and energetic, he has a scar from a wound received when he was struck by a branch under his right wrist, elegantly dressed, majestic, it would take weeks of travel in the spine before he starts to look forlorn, wears a locket of blue and green given to him by his mother. Grand aura of respect. at times bedraggled, respectable, graceful, calm, a golden diamond birthmake at the base of his neck, Muscular, broad shoulders, perfect teeth, Sapphire rich eyes, medium length of graceful hair, light shade of blue and green for hair color, always is wearing his sword "Islingr"at his waist and is always accompanied by Tintaglia. Medium build,on his left hand ring finger he wears a dragon shaped ring of blue gold mixed with green streaks of fire which is an heirloom passed down by his family on his father's side. On his right palm is the Gedway Insignia signifying him as a Dragon Rider. Saphone is that of an Elf mainly looking like an Elf but has traits of a Human at times. Pointed ears but smooth nose. A scar on his lower right thigh appears to be the sigil of the riders (Cause Unknown). Saphone while he is amazing looks afraid when it comes to meeting new people especially those in power.

Personality: A bit shy and uncomfortable with meeting new people,he is Compassionate, Loving, Caring, Rash when it comes to Protecting his friends Family and the Weak, Gentle Spirit at heart but Jealous when something gets between him and Tintaglia, Saphone has this outlook on life that everything has a purpose, he Respects those above him and cares for those who are below him. He has a Calm Demeanor, his only Passion is Tintaglia. He Sacrifices anything for the greater good but would rather tear out his soul than lose Tintaglia. He is Headstrong Merciful, Kind, Playful. But above all else he puts the Weak before the Strong. He would rather die then surrender, Saphone knows when to walk away and when to fight, he is Tactical and Decissive in combat. But his only relief, when in Tain or Turmoil, is his partner of his heart/mind Tintaglia comforting him when he is in distress.

Likes to cuddle and hunt with Tintaglia, likes to read poetry and be with animals and loves to study under Oromis and Glaedr when in Du Weldenvarden. Saphone also loves to fly with Tintaglia on warm bright days so that he can forget his grievances and problems so that he can just enjoy being with his partner for life Tintaglia.

Dislikes those who would hurt others for personal gain and amusement and especially those who would dare to try and harm his partner of his heart/mind Tintaglia

Strengths: wisdom, intelligence, combat, spell weaving

Weaknesses: Saphone's love for his partner Tintaglia and fear of losing Tintaglia. Making speeches (unless they are to people he really knows), Obeying orders from his superiors when his friends and family are in danger 

Birth Family: Father-Marek, Mother-Unknown, Sister-Silvian (last known relative of Saphone)
Adopted Family: Oromis whom he considers like his real father and Glaedr like an Uncle or "Older Brother".

History: Saphone was born in the elven city of Osilon and was half Human, half Elf due to his father being Human and his mother being an Elf. His Elven sister Silvian was 18 when he was born. He grew up in Osilon for 12 years happy and loved by his family. But the years of happiness were not to last for the young Elf/Human boy. Saphone's parents were brutally murdered by Galbatorix in front of him when he and Shruikan attacked the Elven city of Osilon. Saphone's 30 year old sister Silvian manages to pull him away before Shruikan could kill him and they fled to Yazuac. Silvian, Saphone's sister, had been caring for him in the past month while they struggled to stay hidden in Yazuac but they were happy being together just the same. Out of nowhere Imperial Soldiers raid the town and while Saphone manages to flee thanks to his sister staying behind to hold off the Empire's soldiers. Saphone's sister Silvian is taken prisoner unbeknownst to Saphone and Saphone hasn't seen nor heard from her since and he misses her dearly as does Silvian.

.....After he barely escapes the wrath of the Empire, Saphone heads into the wilds bordering Du Weldenvarden and reached the edge of the immense forest after a week. He stayed near ther borders of the forest out of fear of the Unknown due to stories he had heard in Yazuac and was ambushed by an Imperial Spellcaster and group of soldiers. Saphone who is crying up to this point after being attacked is knocked unconscious and dragged to a spot near the creek. The spellcaster hid and ordered the soldiers to do the same and they stayed close by and watched for anyone that got curious...... Meanwhile... 5 weeks had passed since Osilon was attacked and rumors spread to Ellesmera of a spy near the southwestern borders of the forest. Queen Izlanzadi sent Oromis and Glaedr to investigate. After a week of scouring the forest they come up empty handed. But as they were returning to Ellesmera Oromis spotted something below. Glaedr landed in a field and they found traces of fresh blood in the ground. Oromis followed it and found a frightened twelve year old Saphone bleeding out and unconscious, he was whimpering and shaking. So Oromis picked up the little Elven/Human boy and set him in the saddle. Just as Oromis was about to do the same and get into the saddle himself an Imperial Spellcaster and Soldiers emerged.

Oromis finally drove them off after what seemed like hours and Oromis sheathed his sword, Saphone was starting to fall off the saddle so Oromis secured him safely into the saddle and mounted Glaedr himself and so Glaedr took off once again. They went back to Ellesmera and reported to the Queen what had happened.

Izlanzadi was shocked and in turmoil when she saw the little Elven/Human boy and gasped at his wounds. Oromis then related the events that had transpired and Izlanzadi ran her fingers through the young Elven/Human boy's hair. Oromis she asked "why is it that they appeared after you found this boy instead of before finding him?" My Queen, Oromis said kneeling, my guess is that this boy was running from the Soldiers and got ambushed. It must have beeen a trap because I happened to show up and find him and then got attacked out of nowwhere myself. She gazed at the boy still trembling and moaning in pain. Oromis and Izlanzadi allevieated some of Saphone's pain and put him on a bench to rest. Oromis these are ill tidings indeed and I must report all that has happened to the council.

Yes my Queen, said Oromis as he stood up, but what of the boy. If it is not too much trouble he is yours to care for now Oromis. So Izlanzadi gave Oromis custody of Saphone to watch over. Saphone was healed but was unconscious for two weeks. When Saphone woke he felt a bit of nausea and then noticed that Oromis was gently staring at with a caring look in his eyes. Saphone was startled and jumped around scared and crying, but was calmed down quickly by a soft melody being played by Oromis upon a harp and he fell asleep. When he woke up again his nausea had passed and was much more calm. Saphone gazed around at his surroundings and spotted Oromis beside him resting. He looked at the Old Elf/Rider and smiled that he had cared much for Saphone. When Oromis woke a few minutes later they introduced themselves and Saphone told Oromis everything that had befallen him. There was much sorrow in the older Elf's/Rider's eyes and Saphone knew that Oromis felt pity for Saphone even before Oromis spoke his mind. So from that point on Oromis began training Saphone the ways of fighting and magic. After a few weeks he was presented with an egg that hatched into a marvelous female blue dragon. Saphone named her Tintaglia and now they share a bond that few riders ever possessed with their own dragons. When it was time to get a sword for his rise to Knighthood and he discovered that the Elven smith Rhunon could not forge one for him due to her Oath he went for a walk deep within Du Weldenvarden alone because Tintaglia was sleeping. Saphone was thinking about something as he tripped over a metal object and he discovered deep within the forest a marvelous blue blade with flecks of green and gold here and there and Saphone read the name "Islingr" and it was actually made of brightsteel. He was wondering why it had lain there in the muck and not used at all but expelled the thought because now at least he had a sword. Surprisingly it was well accustomed to his fighting styles.

Saphone joined the Varden at the age of 15 when Tintaglia was only 3 years of age. The pair fought many battles alongside Eragon Shadeslayer and Saphira Brightscales against Murtagh, Rogue Urgals and Galbatorix's army. At 16 Saphone was a talented writer, artist, warrior, and was always showing his affection toward Tintaglia as she did the same anytime they could, but knew in their hearts that they would never truly be free until the mad king was vanquished....... Both still have a lot to learn in the ways of combat. They need more experience otherwise they will be overwhelmed by their powerful foes and even though Saphone is half elf he still has a lot to learn in magic and melee. But Tintaglia though an excellent flyer still needs more practice at fighting while still doing evasive maneuvers on land. They also still need to gain more experience and skill enough to be efficient at fighting apart from one another and still have the same skill they would have as if they were still together.

 

 Dragon Bio: Fierce, Strong-Willed, Loving, Cautious, Smart, Wise, Majestic

Name: Tintaglia Istalri
Side: Varden
Birthplace: Varden dragon Academy, she was being presented to the "next generation" of Dragon Riders when she felt Saphone's presence and hatched for Saphone when she felt a kindred spirit within him
Age: 4 years 
Gender: Female

Eyes: Blue laced with flecks of Dark Green
Scale Color: Dark Blue with traces of Green here and there

Appearance: In the sky Tintaglia looks like a fire in the noonday sun, a Spectacular Wonder for all to see.. A symbol of hope to her allies and as beautiful as the setting sun upon the leaves of Du Weldenvarden, Tintaglia truly is a daughter of the wind

Personality: Loving, Compassionate, Intelligent, Strong, Gentle, but Devestating to those who would dare to try and harm her partner of her heart/mind Saphone, also Playful

Likes: Spending time with Saphone and hunting alone now and then to hone her skill
Dislikes: Being separated from Saphone and arguing with Saphone about their problems
Strengths: Flying, Fighting, Leading, Comforting Others, Courage, Respect, "Finding the Light within the Darkness"
Weakness (Weaknesses): Saphone, Jealousy, Obeying Commands when friends are in danger

Password-   "Nuanen Brisingr"
Password- "Eragon and Saphira"

[Emiryal ♕]

This is a good start but you will need to add a bit more to the bio. We like to have more detailed bios. And there is a word minimum requirement for a few of the sections, so just keep going with the bio and make sure you get enough words in each section.

Appearance must have 100 words.
Personality must have 100 words.
History must have 200 words.

[Quetzal]

Also, your power class application hasn't actually been accepted yet. You can leave this up, but you need to wait until that application has been accepted first. It's just how things work here; you apply for a power class slot, then if that gets accepted, you can apply with the bio of a power class character.

[Brenton]

Just work on this while the staff look at your power class request.

[Quetzal]

OK, so now your power class slot has been accepted, we can start considering this application! This looks very promising indeed, but like Emi said it needs to be a bit longer. Also, it's a minor detail, but Rhunon wouldn't have made him a sword since she swore in the Ancient Language not to, Eragon being the only exception she ever managed to make. It's really a tiny detail, though.

Couple of pointers if you're stuck trying to flesh it out; instead of writing the list-type paragraph you've done for the appearance section, you could try making each point or a few related points into a sentence fully formed sentence, describing it in more detail. It'd make it flow better and would also lengthen it out and make it easier to picture him.

For the history, you could split it into a couple of paragraphs with more stuff that happened in his life, may a bit about his background too.

These are all just suggestions! Feel free to completely ignore me and do whatever you want. You can check out some of the alread accepted Rider applications (Emiryal's ones are pretty long and good) as examples, and there's also a guide to making good characters here; argetlamrpg.proboards.com/thread/2224/create-good-character

[Brenton]

This timeframe is off a bit, sorry for saying that, but that is another point that should be mentioned. Eragon alone has been a rider for around a year or two and Morzan was dead before that (that's according to the books and not the site where Eragon would actually be a rider of several years or something like that.) Not exactly sure on a timeline for the site but I will get my hands on the site timeline wherever that is to let you know what goes on. Not a big deal really just wanted to let you know that time is different here than what it would be in the books.

[Emiryal ♕]

Yeah pretty much what the others have said. Usually the best way to find a rider sword now is to find an old one, no new ones have been made since Eragon's blade.

And yes our timeline is different, an alternate universe. Something staff is working on sorting out currently. But pretty much we are at the point in the book right before the Varden attack uru'baen. So there isn't a new generation of riders yet. Eggs have been found though so Eragon isn't the only rider. Sorry for the mix up. Being an alternate universe is kinda confusing.

Oh, my dragon rider bios.? Aw thanks Queztal. Most of my bios are super detailed especially my riders. If you want to see one of mine I can link you to some Dragonkin.

[Quetzal]

Oh right, BRenton made a good point. Your character would have had to be older to have encountered Morzan. I think Morzan died when Murtagh was young, but I'm not sure. Could be about 10 years or so ago.

[Quetzal]

OK, had the chance to look through it again properly, and it's nearly there. The appearance section still should be longer, and preferably not take the form of a list. The personality section could be longer, but is more or less fine as it is. You might want to add another weakness, something he's not so good at. No one's good at everything, after all. The history section is very good, but unfortunately the time problem has now shifted from Morzan to Murtagh. Murtagh became a Rider two years ago at most by the site's timeline, but your bio has him as a Rider when Saphone was 9, which was seven years ago. You could replace it with some ordinary Empire warriors, they're always ready to be spawned. You've also left Morzan's name in later on in the history section, but I'm guessing that's just a typo. I don't blame you for being confused about the time frame; it's really complicated and the staff members are working on sorting it all out with a clear timeline.

You're close to being accepted, so don't worry! I think Saphone would get along well with my character Isrydia (there's a link to her bio in my signiture). I also play Eragon, and he might be able to give Saphone some training, too

[Brenton]

Brenton would be able to help train Saphone a bit in his time where he's not going ballistic from losing his dragon and getting a cruxis crystal from his first dragon's eldunari. Don't ask what all of that is please because it is a long story and such.

[Quetzal]

Minor continuity error where Saphone is 12 when his family are killed, is found when he's 9 and after four years is 16, but I'm going to hazard a guess that the 9 years old bit was just a mistake. The appearance still is too list-like, but there isn't anything I can see that would prevent this character being allowed out in the world, so...

Accepted! I'll PM you some ideas for RPing