Keri Lupus

[Vardy]

so, why don't you fix those 2 things, re-post it and i'll look over it again and if its good, i'll PM you the rider's quiz

[DarkSilver]

Full Name : Keri Lupus
Other name : Alphenna ( look in history)

Race: : Human -part elf ( Inherited minor magic powers from her grandmother who was a sorceress and half elf.)

Side : Varden-

Birthplace: North Spine

Age : 17

Gender : Female

Birthday : 15th June

Eyes : Dark gold eyes

Hair: Copper-red hair to just above her elbows. In slight ringlets and curls around her shoudlers. Clips it up when fighting or hunting.


Weight : 170

Height : 6''0
form: Slender but very strong. She is fit compared to most humans but she doubts she could compete with any elf without further training. Is an excellent climber.

Magic User : Yes - Inherited minor magic from her grandmother who was a sorceress and gained more power when the dragon egg hatched for her.

Clothing.Black leather pants with mail covering front and leather t-shirt also backed with mail. ( fighting) black leather pants and buckskin t-shirt (Hunting) (casual) black T-shirt and blue riding fabric pants.

Prefered weapon(s) :-Long curved sword dark blue matching Saeunn's scales in colour with black pommel that has a vicious sharp spike on the end named Garjzla
or ''light''.


Personality :Keri is Kind and determined to the point of stubborness. She chooses what to do and goes to it to the very end. She wishes to help those who cannot help themselves and to do that she'd do anything. She's kind and has a strong heart and a good sence of humour.She never overreacts.. She's calm when under pressure and thinks things through well. She becomes vicious when friends are harmed or endangeres which brings out the power in her. Has a strong leader quality which she got from her parents. The alpha and alphena of her old pack which spread throughout Alagaesia. She is very curious and is told she is brave and bold and would never allow herself to be overpowered or put down.



Likes/Dislikes :She loves her flights with Saeunn ( Sa- un).Despises those who put their lives over others and those who kill another for no reason and no understanding why they did so.
Family : Mother: Renn Father:Khan.Brother : Torak. ( all deceased)

Brief History : Keri was born to the alpha pair of the rebel group called '' The Wolf pack'' .
A group that left the empire and fled to build forces in the west of Alagaesia before moving to join the varden.They lived deep in the Spine and lived there recruiting more people to fight against the empire.
.One night the pack lands were raided by urgals and soldiers of the Empire and two shades. One named Durza and another named Korinth . The pack was destroyed and tortured as they asked about a saphire Dragons egg .Her brother was tortured before her eyes. She tried to defend her family but they were all killed and most of the pack managed to escape . They tortured her to try and discover what she knew of this egg. They attacked her and in the fight she injured the shade named Korinth, an urgal struck her in the front with a deadly blade.leaving a deep ragged wound , they then left her with deathly wound's beleiving she would'nt survive. With the little magic she had she healed her wounds as best as she could but was left with ragged scars. She traveled into a town once her wounds had healed and she heard of the dragon egg. She had no other place to go. So she traveled across Alagaesia to the Varden. She stayed there to allow herself to recouperate. When the dragon eggs that were found were brought to Surda a dark blue one caught her eye. She watched it with awe at is beautiful shape and colour. Within the day the egg hatched for her. She then vowed to help the riders opposing Galbatorix in any way she could. When Seaunn turned one and a half they began to travel to Du Weldenvarden to begin their training.


Anything extra : Rides a dark blue dragon named Saeunn.

Dragon Profile:

Name: Saeunn

Age : 1 and a half years

Gender : Male

Eyes: Silver

Scales: Penetrating dark blue.

Claws, spines, and teeth: Claws are black but his teeth and spines are silvery white.

Personallity: He is caring and quick witted. At times he can be as stubborn as Keri and even more so. He cares greatly for her and he longs for the company of others like himself.


Rp sample.
The young , 14yr old blood red haired girl sat on the thickest branch at the top of a great redwood. Feeling perfectly at ease even 50 ft above the ground. She loved her perch , she would sit here and help with the lookouts for hours. The redwoods circled the packs summer territory and enabled to searchers to keep a good lookout without being seen. With their eagle like sight they could see the movements of a shrew with ease even up here.The wind blew into keri's face and she savoured the woodish smells and the smokey tang of the deer that was roasting back at camp.
'' Mmmmm...Venisen ''Keri said licking her lips at the thought of supper. '' You hungry Keri ? '' rang a young mans voice from the tree that was just across from the one in which Keri was sitting. '' Of course. I've been up here all day with you '' she said. '' I did'nt make you , you can always stand to be a little lighter , will let you run faster '' he said laughing. '' You'll be the one who needs to run faster if you keep being a cheeky sod Torak '' she said to him smirking. '' What ya gonna do? '' asked Torak in a mock frightened voice. '' I'm gonna...'' Keri started but a terrible crashing sound rang over the terra so loud that the ground shook. The branch Torak was sitting on snapped and he fell. He let out a terrible scream as the ground left from beneath him. '' TORAK!'' Keri yelled as she saw her 16 yr old brother falling. She jumped across the trees and sank Garjzla into the trunk lightly to slow her down as she fell. She came to a halt and she jumped from that stop towards Torak catching him in mid air. She sank Garjzla into the trunk and set her brother on the branch. '' You ok? '' she asked seathing Garzla as she sat on the branch. ''What did you do?????'' he asked. ''it wasnt me you idiot. You ok?'' she asked again.'' Yeah '' he spoke in a shaken voice. ''What was that? '' he asked looking around with wide eyes. '' I dunno but it did'nt sound good. You climb higher and I'll go have a looksie'' she said with a serious expression...She jumped to thr ground with a light thud and ran across the forest floor heart pumping furiously.
The air caught in Keri's lungs as she saw a huge redwood, torn from the ground and dead. Keri could;'nt imagine what beast could have done such damage in such a time.
Cries of pain and fear burst into the night and Keri turned and she ran towards the howls of pain from her pack desperate and determined to help save them from the unknown torementor.She stopped dead as she saw the fire. The packs main grounds were bathed in deep red flames. She saw dark hooded figures casting spells at her family and friends. Torak came from the woods beside her and ran towards the figure in the centre who was torturing their father.
'' NO ! Stop you m.....'' she was cut short as she felt a great pain passing through her as a curse hit her in the back from the unnoticed Shade and hit the ground hard ,arms bleeding She got back up again but stumbled slightly. Dazed she watched in horror as her father was thrown hard against a tree the broken brach breaking through his flesh. Then it was all a daze of hate and anger. Keri heard a surreal snarl come from her , she leapt at a soldier and with Garjzla seperated his head from his shoudlers.Not stopping she leapt at another figure knocking him from his feet.Keri turned and ran by the dead and the dying towards a huge creature, a Kull .She leapt at the kull and a howl of rage sinking Garjzla into hhis shoulder. Being careful to dodge the huge sword that hung at his side.
Pain burst through her as a spell hit her in the side. She felt her skin spilt as she hit a rock and she curled up to let the pain submerge. Her vision was red and black spots as she staggered to her feet.Still holding the dark blue sword .She heard a howl of pain and a sickening jolt hit her heart.The howl of her brother . His cries of pain willed her legs to move faster .She ran back into the clearing and saw her beloved 16 yearold brother being tortured by somone unknown as she could'nt see his face. She ran toward him and bellowed. '' Leave him alone!!!! ''
The tormentor turned and a great sickness hit er heart.She wished to scream but she couldnt , she was stunned, the sickening face of the shade leered at her.His blood red eyes penetrated her very soul.She was hit in the gut by the kulls club and was thrown against a tree splintering several of her ribs and leaving her gasping for breath.
She stumbled to her feet onece again. She saw her brother fall dead at the creatures feet. Rage welled inside her and she threw herself at the shade she felt Barjzla bury inside the skin of his arm and dark blood run over it.
Pain rushed through her as she heard a spell cast she felt the pain rush through her every fibre, through every vein every part of her soul . She could'nt take it , it was to much , she wanted to die , to die to end the horror that filled her. Her screams echoed around the canopy , she heard them laughing at her pain. She fell to her knees and looked up to the sky hot tears of pain running down her cheeks. She barley heard the ringing sound of a sword being withdrawn from its sheath. The silver sword slit across her stomach and half way around her back slicing protective armour and skin. Her pain surged through her back as the sword dug deeper Blood poured down over her legs from her stomach to the small of her back and the pain would'nt end.
She lifted Garjzla and he strength grew she pulled herself up and howled a word of power sending ice over the blade then making them glow red hot with flame. She struck the shade through his chest and it bellowed in pain and rage. The wold tilted sickeningly and Keri lost all strength and plummeted into the dark.


((Can't have a riders sword sorry - Metri))

[Vardy]

ok. the profile is ok now. i'll PM you the quiz

[Ragond]

I was bored, I suppose, so I edited your RP post to show you what it should look like, and how you will be asked to post. As for accepting this, nah, I'm stingy. If another mod thinks its good, well then you'll get accepted, what annoys me is the part where she kills the shade, not a chance.

The young, fourteen year old blood red haired girl sat on the thickest branch at the top of a great redwood. Feeling perfectly at ease even fifty feet above the ground, she loved her perch; she would sit here and help with the lookouts for hours. The redwoods circled the packs summer territory and enabled to searchers to keep a good lookout without being seen. ((With their eagle like sight they could see the movements of a shrew with ease even up here – (removed completely for unrealisticness))) The wind blew into Keri’s face and she savored the woodland smells and the tang of the deer that was roasting back at camp.

'' Mmmmm…Venison” Keri said licking her lips at the thought of supper, ''you hungry Keri?'' rang a young mans voice from the tree that was just across from the one in which Keri was sitting.

“Of course, I've been up here all day with you,” she said.

''I didn’t make you, you can always stand to be a little lighter, will let you run faster'' he said laughing.

''You'll be the one who needs to run faster if you keep being a cheeky sod Torak.” She said to him smirking.

''What ya gonna do?'' asked Torak in a mock frightened voice.
''I'm gonna...'' Keri started but a terrible crashing sound rang over the terra so loud that the ground shook. The branch Torak was sitting on snapped and he fell. He let out a terrible scream as the ground left from beneath him. ''Torak! (You already specified that he yelled, no need for caps)'' Keri yelled as she saw her sixteen year old brother falling. She jumped across the trees and sank Garjzla into the trunk lightly to slow her down as she fell. She came to a halt and she jumped from that stop towards Torak catching him in mid air. She sank Garjzla into the trunk and set her brother on the branch. ''You ok?'' She asked sheathing Garjzla as she sat on the branch.

''What did you do?'' he asked.

''It wasn’t me you idiot. You ok?'' she asked again.

''Yeah'' he said in a shaken voice. ''What was that?'' he asked looking around with wide eyes.

''I dunno but it didn’t sound good. You climb higher and I'll go have a looksie'' she said with a serious expression...She jumped to the ground with a light thud and ran across the forest floor heart pumping furiously.

The air caught in Keri's lungs as she saw a huge redwood, torn from the ground and dead. Keri couldn’t imagine what beast could have done such damage in such a time.
Cries of pain and fear burst into the night and Keri turned and she ran towards the howls of pain from her pack desperate and determined to help save them from the unknown tormentor. She stopped dead as she saw the fire. The packs main grounds were bathed in deep red flames. She saw dark hooded figures casting spells at her family and friends. Torak came from the woods beside her and ran towards the figure in the centre who was torturing their father. ''No! Stop you m.....'' She screamed.
She was cut short when one of the men yelled “Sylitha.”

Pain burst through her as a spell hit her in the side, awakening her. She felt her skin spilt as she hit a rock and she curled up to let the pain submerge. Her vision was red and black spots as she staggered to her feet, still holding the dark blue sword. She heard a howl of pain and a sickening jolt hit her heart. The howl of her brother, his cries of pain willed her legs to move faster. She ran back into the clearing and saw her beloved sixteen year old brother being tortured by someone unknown as she couldn’t see his face. She ran toward him and bellowed. ''Leave him alone!''
The tormentor turned and a great sickness hit her heart. She wished to scream but she couldn’t, she was stunned, the sickening face of the shade leered at her. His blood red eyes penetrated her very soul. She was hit in the gut by the kulls club and was thrown against a tree splintering several of her ribs and leaving her gasping for breath.
She stumbled to her feet once again. She saw her brother fall dead at the creature’s feet. Rage welled inside her and she threw herself at the shade she felt Garjzla bury inside the skin of his arm and dark blood run over it.
Pain rushed through her as she heard a spell cast she felt the pain rush through her every fiber, through every vein every part of her soul. She couldn’t take it, it was to much, she wanted to die, to die to end the horror that filled her. Her screams echoed around the canopy , she heard them laughing at her pain. She fell to her knees and looked up to the sky hot tears of pain running down her cheeks. She barley heard the ringing sound of a sword being withdrawn from its sheath. The silver sword slit across her stomach and half way around her back slicing protective amour and skin. Her pain surged through her back as the sword dug deeper Blood poured down over her legs from her stomach to the small of her back and the pain wouldn’t end.

((She lifted Garjzla and he strength grew she pulled herself up and howled a word of power sending ice over the blade then making them glow red hot with flame. She struck the shade through his chest and heart and in his chest and it bellowed in pain and rage. The world tilted sickeningly and Keri lost all strength and plummeted into the dark. – (the shade would have predicted her actions as he was likely within her mind, impossible, she could not have killed it.)))

[Vardy]

lol. yeah. but its just a sample RP.
just don't make stuff unrealistic. think of what you can do now as a human and what Eragon can do. as long as its w/i that circle of realism (or w/e) its fine. no god-modding. k?
now take the rider quiz and we'll see if you pass

[DarkSilver]

I'll keep that in mind . I've just replied the test so tell me how i did

^_^
EDIT: oh yeah *blush* I forgot to get rid of the shrew thing when I edited it. Ok I edited it so she only injured him and now she wants revenge for him killing her family and friends. ^_^ Oh and I'll re post with the other edits in it too. Thaks for the help guys ^_^

[Vardy]

np. its what we do.
you passd the rider quiz.
accepted. finally

[Nihael]

you do know that they did have the claw things right?

[DarkSilver]

Full Name : Keri Lupus
Other name : Alphena (Queen)( look in history)

Race: : Human ( Inherited minor magic powers from her grandmother who was a sorceress and unknown to Keri; half elf.)

Side : Varden

Birthplace: North Spine

Age; 17
Gender : Female

Birthday : 15th June

Eyes : Dark silver eyes

Hair: Dark copper-red hair to just above her elbows. In slight ringlets and curls around her shoulders. Clips it up when fighting or hunting.


Weight : 170

Height :6''0
form: Slender but very strong. She is extremely fit compared to other humans. She is strong and agile. Has enormous stamina even compared to elves. She has learned her skills from the lands where she lived most of her life. Shes an excellent climber and is very flexible and graceful. Strikes at fast speeds and deadly force . Has slightly elfish features but most revealing of which is her dark silver penetrating eyes.

Magic User: Yes - Inherited minor magic from her grandmother who was a sorceress and part elf and gained more power when the dragon egg hatched for her. Knows a few forms of spells that have been lost.

Clothing: Black leather pants with mail covering front and leather t-shirt also backed with mail. (fighting). Black leather pants and buckskin t-shirt (Hunting) (casual) Light brown buckskin shirt and dark green pants with thick leather pads on the inner legs so she can ride Saeunn with no need for a saddle.

Preferred weapon(s) :- Long, slightly curved sword. Dark silver colour with black pommel that has a narrow spike on the end. Named Garjzla or ''light''. She is extremely skilled with the sword but will need more training before she can battle competently with an elf. She is best with hand to hand combat with her stamina and her fast reaction speeds, is very inventive when fighting; it being her main skill.


Personality :Keri is Kind and determined to the point of stubbornness. She chooses what to do and goes to it to the very end. She wishes to help those who cannot help themselves and to do that she'd do anything. She's kind and has a strong heart and a good sense of humor.She rarely overreacts.. She's calm when under pressure and thinks things through well. She becomes vicious when friends are harmed or endangered which brings out the power in her. Has a strong leader quality which she got from her parents. The alpha and alphena of her old pack which dominated the uninhabited western areas. She is very curious and is told she is brave and bold and would never allow herself to be overpowered or put down. At times her determination bewilders even herself , she would fight until her last breath for friends and family.



Likes/Dislikes: She loves her flights with Saeunn ( Say- une).Enjoys playful spars and games of hunt which she used to play with her brother. Which helped her develop her hunting skills and speed. Despises those who put their lives over others and those who kill another for no reason and no understanding why they did so.
Family : Mother: Renn Father:Khan.Brother : Torak. ( all deceased)

Brief History : Keri was born to the alpha pair of the rebel group called '' The pack'' .
A group that left the empire and fled to build forces in the west of Alagaesia; before moving to join the varden.They lived deep in the Spine and lived there recruiting more people to fight against the Empire.
One night the pack lands were raided by urgals and soldiers of the Empire and two shades. One named Durza and another named Korinth . The pack was destroyed and tortured as they asked about a saphire Dragons egg .Her brother was tortured before her eyes. She tried to defend her family but they were all killed and most of the pack managed to escape . They tortured her to try and discover what she knew of this egg. They attacked her and in the fight she injured the shade named Korinth, an urgal struck her in the front with a deadly blade.leaving a deep ragged wound , they then left her with deathly wound's believing she wouldn't survive. With the little magic she had she healed her wounds as best as she could but was left with ragged scars. She traveled into a town once her wounds had healed and she heard of the dragon egg. She had no other place to go. So she traveled across Alagaesia to the Varden. She stayed there to allow herself to recuperate. When the dragon eggs that were found were brought to Surda a dark blue one caught her eye. She watched it with awe at is beautiful shape and colour. Within the day the egg hatched for her.


ADDITION TO HISTORY : About a month after Saeunn hatched for her the two left Surda and lived deep in the forests of Du WeldenVarden away from and civilization and alongside the creatures of the forest. Keri encountered many strange creatures and not all friendly. But she soon learned their ways and learned how to communicate with them with her mind, and was almost adopted into a pack of silver wolves.
She learned their ways , their ways of fighting , hunting , feeding , socializing , that's when she discovered people and creatures aren't all that different at all.

Keri is now more wolf than human. Her years in the forest taught her the ways of a wild animal and unearthed her primal instincts. She is very swift and fights in a true wolf's style.
She and Saeunn sometimes worry that the instincts will one day overpower her.

When traveling to Surda Keri encountered two shades, who called themselves the children of Korinth the shade Keri had weakened in the attack. They attacked her and she was left with a menacingly deep wound on the top of her shoulders where a winged black creatures claws dug into her so deep the shoulder blades were marked by scratches.
A month later Keri encountered the shade's again who were waiting for her in Aberon. She fought them and many riders and members of the varden came to her assistance. She gained many scars, a whip scar around her neck and right forearm, a shallow slice across the back of her shoulders passing the claw wounds and agitating them, and two deep stabs on her thigh and side where the shades poisoned dagger had wounded her.

The attack had sent her into a massive blood rage and awoke the side of her the wolves had brought up in her, her true wild instincts.

Two weeks later she awoke from consciousness to find that though her physical health was still good as ever but the poison seems to have destroyed the link between her and Saeunn. She cannot talk to him through the mind link and cannot feel him with her. She will soon consult one of great magic for assistance as she does not have Saeunn's magic with her anymore.

After meeting a man named Arkantos, he found a ring in the throat of a wolf he had slain which angered Keri. Through clashing instincts she dislikes his attitude to wolves, but she trusts him in an odd way. She finds he is the only one he does trust. The ring seemed to have some kinda of power, through which healed the scars left on Keri's body and the link between herself and Saeunn was restored. She hopes to meet Arkantos again some day.


Anything extra : Rides a very dark blue (almost black) dragon named Saeunn. Finds company in wolves, and would defend them from hunters.
Dragon Profile:

Name: Saeunn

Age : 1 and a half years

Gender : Male

Eyes: Silver

Scales: Very dark blue. ( Near black)

Claws, spines, and teeth: Claws are black but his teeth and spines are white.

Personality: He is caring and quick witted. At times he can be as stubborn as Keri and even more so. He cares greatly for her and he longs for the company of others like himself.

RP sample:


The young, fourteen year old blood red haired girl sat on the thickest branch at the top of a great redwood. Feeling perfectly at ease even fifty feet above the ground, she loved her perch; she would sit here and help with the lookouts for hours. The redwoods circled the packs summer territory and enabled to searchers to keep a good lookout without being seen.
The wind blew into Keri’s face and she savored the woodland smells and the tang of the deer that was roasting back at camp.

'' Mmmmm…Venison” Keri said licking her lips at the thought of supper, ''you hungry Keri?'' rang a young mans voice from the tree that was just across from the one in which Keri was sitting.

“Of course, I've been up here all day with you,” she said.

''I didn’t make you, you can always stand to be a little lighter, will let you run faster'' he said laughing.

''You'll be the one who needs to run faster if you keep being a cheeky sod Torak.” She said to him smirking.

''What ya gonna do?'' asked Torak in a mock frightened voice.
''I'm gonna...'' Keri started but a terrible crashing sound rang over the terra so loud that the ground shook. The branch Torak was sitting on snapped and he fell. He let out a terrible scream as the ground left from beneath him. ''Torak!'' Keri yelled as she saw her sixteen year old brother falling. She jumped across the trees and sank Garjzla into the trunk lightly to slow her down as she fell. She came to a halt and she jumped from that stoptoward Torak catching him in mid air. She sank Garjzla into the trunk and set her brother on the branch. ''You OK?'' She asked sheathing Garjzla as she sat on the branch.

''What did you do?'' he asked.

''It wasn’t me you idiot. You ok?'' she asked again.

''Yeah'' he said in a shaken voice. ''What was that?'' he asked looking around with wide eyes.

''I dunno but it didn’t sound good. You climb higher and I'll go have a looksie'' she said with a serious expression...She jumped to the ground with a light thud and ran across the forest floor heart pumping furiously.

The air caught in Keri's lungs as she saw a huge redwood, torn from the ground and dead. Keri couldn’t imagine what beast could have done such damage in such a time.
Cries of pain and fear burst into the night and Keri turned and she ran toward the howls of pain from her pack desperate and determined to help save them from the unknown tormentor. She stopped dead as she saw the fire. The packs main grounds were bathed in deep red flames. She saw dark hooded figures casting spells at her family and friends. Torak came from the woods beside her and ran towards the figure in the center who was torturing their father. ''No! Stop you m.....'' She screamed.
She was cut short when one of the men yelled “Sylitha.”

Pain burst through her as a spell hit her in the side, awakening her. She felt her skin split as she hit a rock and she curled up to let the pain submerge. Her vision was red and black spots as she staggered to her feet, still holding the dark blue sword. She heard a howl of pain and a sickening jolt hit her heart. The howl of her brother, his cries of pain willed her legs to move faster. She ran back into the clearing and saw her beloved sixteen year old brother being tortured by someone unknown as she couldn’t see his face. She ran toward him and bellowed. ''Leave him alone!''
The tormentor turned and a great sickness hit her heart. She wished to scream but she couldn’t, she was stunned, the sickening face of the shade leered at her. His blood red eyes penetrated her very soul. She was hit in the gut by the kulls club and was thrown against a tree splintering several of her ribs and leaving her gasping for breath.
She stumbled to her feet once again. She saw her brother fall dead at the creature’s feet. Rage welled inside her and she threw herself at the shade she felt Garjzla bury inside the skin of his arm and dark blood run over it.
Pain rushed through her as she heard a spell cast ,she felt the pain rush through her every fiber, through every vein every part of her soul. She couldn’t take it, it was to much, she wanted to die, to die to end the horror that filled her. Her screams echoed around the canopy , she heard them laughing at her pain. She fell to her knees and looked up to the sky hot tears of pain running down her cheeks. She barley heard the ringing sound of a sword being withdrawn from its sheath. The silver sword slit across her stomach and half way around her back slicing protective amour and skin. Her pain surged through her back as the sword dug deeper Blood poured down over her legs from her stomach to the small of her back and the pain wouldn’t end.

She lifted Garjzla and he strength grew she pulled herself up and howled a word of power sending ice over the blade then making them glow red hot with flame. She struck the shade through his chest and it bellowed in pain and rage. The world tilted sickeningly and Keri lost all strength and plummeted into the dark.



Thanks for all the help greatly appreciated ^_^

[DarkSilver]

YAY! Took long enough hehe. just messing. Right . So now can I ask. Should I start the posting travelling to Du WeldenVarden?

Ya I knew about the claws but I'm happy with the sword and I was after all in no state to argue hehe.

[Ragond]

Great work, you passed the rider qiz, right? As soon as you confirm that, I'll move this to the "Accepted Charecters."

[DarkSilver]

Thanks ^_^.confirmed. Can I begin posting anywhere ?( within reason) Or for new riders is it specific?

[Vardy]

yeah. she passed