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Post by Niniel on Jan 12, 2006 16:45:07 GMT -5
We don't use money any more, sorry. Ok.. what to fix... I think there should be more in the personality area. Describe to us what makes him different from other beings. I mean, anyone can be bright, wise, impatient, and gullible. Give him depth, make him seem real. If you need to, you can sort of describe yourself or another person. Or go have a look at one of the characters that have been accepted already. You can look at one of mine, or any of the other staffers, just look for topics started by people with colored names. The history is all right, but I would prefer it if it was longer.
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Post by dannylam4 on Jan 12, 2006 17:25:15 GMT -5
Don't double post, and we don't contact you to tell you what's wrong like PMing or EMail. You check here, see what we posts, change it, and then maybe post again to ask if that's okay. Obviously you haven't been reading what we've been saying cause I've said it about 2 or 3 times now that you need more in your personality then just one worded descriptions.
Edit: Your history should also be extended. You've got a lot of blanks in your history. An 84 year old elf should have more history then a tournament and a sparing match.
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 13, 2006 17:57:36 GMT -5
is that any better??????
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Post by dannylam4 on Jan 13, 2006 18:16:38 GMT -5
><! Asking you to extend something doesn't mean add 1 more line to your history! And try spelling properly. If you're actually 17 like your profile says, then you should be able to spell, capitalize, and other such stuff.
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 13, 2006 19:09:00 GMT -5
danny do u have any Ideas for my history. if so can u please write it to me?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!?
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Post by dannylam4 on Jan 13, 2006 23:46:53 GMT -5
V.V This isn't my character sheet to do and if you can't figure all this out, you won't be able to RP very well. You're just leaving pieces out of your history! You say he was captured, but by who and what was he doing? Why was he captured? WHO WHAT WHERE WHEN WHY!!!
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Post by Ragond on Jan 14, 2006 0:15:26 GMT -5
You forgot HOW,  , yes I agree with Danny, this thing needs more detail. |
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Post by dannylam4 on Jan 14, 2006 12:10:15 GMT -5
<< Right right... I knew that...
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 15, 2006 14:51:39 GMT -5
how is that???????????????????????
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Post by Niniel on Jan 15, 2006 15:34:18 GMT -5
Let me ask you this.. what do you think needs to be worked on in your profile to get accepted?
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 15, 2006 16:11:16 GMT -5
well, I changed my history and I think it's good enough and no one tells me that anything else is wrong' so I really don't know.
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Post by Niniel on Jan 15, 2006 16:44:59 GMT -5
Have you looked at some of the accepted character sheets? Like one of the staffers? That's the best way to judge whether or not your sheet is up to scratch. Go look at one of those and then look at your own again, and then tell me what you could work on.
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 18, 2006 17:16:31 GMT -5
is that any better????????????
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Post by Vavrinec on Jan 18, 2006 17:33:05 GMT -5
Heres a hint: Only Shades have eyes that are red in colour. You need to change that to hazel or something normal.
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 19, 2006 16:26:15 GMT -5
is that all that had to be changed?
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Post by Vavrinec on Jan 19, 2006 17:14:13 GMT -5
For now, yeah.
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Post by dannylam4 on Jan 20, 2006 17:45:57 GMT -5
Uh.... I don't really know what else to say. It's not perfect, but I guess that's about as good as it's gonna get. Just make sure your Roleplaying, when you do roleplay that is, is not lacking quality. Any other staffers have anything to say about this?
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Post by tomhead3 on Jan 20, 2006 18:37:47 GMT -5
what is role play
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Post by Niniel on Jan 20, 2006 19:01:41 GMT -5
Are you serious? Wow.... ok.. I'm not allowing this character sheet to be accepted until you can answer your own question. No one is to tell him what role play is, he needs to be the one to answer it.
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Post by Vavrinec on Jan 20, 2006 19:02:18 GMT -5
OMG!!!!! If you dont know what roleplaying is, why did you apply in the first place?!
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, yes I agree with Danny, this thing needs more detail.
